This was obviously translated into English from a different language. The dialogue needs to be reworked so that it makes sense. Right now, a sense of the story can be understood by the pictures and some of the phrases in the dialogue, but it doesn't flow naturally, and is difficult to read. So I can only sort of tell what's going on. I want to like this but it's hard to at the moment. Is there a plan in place to go back and fix dialogue issues? Do you need any help with the english translations?
It's a little confusing because the text on your Itch pages read as perfect English, but the dialogue in the Story does not.