Whoa dude! The presentation is really high quality here! The models and animation are nice, and the soundscape really fits the mood, but the best part is the camera work- the camera setup creates interesting picture, but it readable all the time! Good work on that!
One thing I would change- the shader used to "burn" the paper looks more like dissolving than burning. Maybe some smoke particles would help?
The cutscene itself looks like something from a middle of the game, or a part of an ending. In that context it looks fine, but seeing it by itself leaves questions. Who is this guy? What was on the piece of paper?
Over all- definitely one of the best looking submissions!